“Hello everypony, Snogwritts here!
I recently just finished reading, “Before the rhyming,” by Moustache Queen and I do
have a lot of thoughts about this fic.”
“So, without further a do, let’s get right to it.”
“Okay so let’s start with the main character of this fic, Zecora, the mysterious zebra.
The fic starts off with the Clear Water Harvest celebration.
It’s a yearly tradition for the Zebra tribe, and it seems that’s it’s Zecoras very
first Clear Water Harvest.”
“I always known Zecora for her mysterious nature, but something still intrigues me to
this day.
Why did she send me that potion anyway?”
“Miss Twilight!
I came here as fast as I could, is there something you need?”
“Huh?
You want me to drink this?”
“Hmm…
It looks promising….”
Gulp*
“Eh!
It tastes like toothpaste!”
!...
“Umm…
I don’t feel any different.”
“Umm…
Miss Twilight?
Are you alright?”
“What’s the matter?”
“Eh…
Don’t know what she was so worked up about.
Note to self, Zecoras potions taste like toothpaste.
”
“Anyways, this fic really does a good job with its simple storyline, it flows really
well and I especially like the unexpected ending, so, regards to the author for that.”
“There's something that bothers me about this and that’s the main character.
I like Zecora because mysterious she is and some other readers do to.
However, the main character doesn’t feel like she had a personality in the flashback.”
“This happens a lot with many flashbacks in stories, sometime the characters feels
like the same or they aren’t really a character at all.
It didn’t really kept me interested in reading.
Be careful when doing flashbacks, it can make or break your story.”
“This story feels out of place on its genre, I don’t really see any comedy incorporated
in this story other than the ending.
Actually, it felt more of a sadfic, or more likely, a slice of life fanfic.
Just something to always keep in mind that genres categorize the overall story, not just
one specific part.”
“Tone isn’t embraced as much here, especially with Zecora's battle with the lion.
Figurative language is essential to make the reader feel about something at that certain
moment.
I wish the author would incorporate that a little more.”
“Oh, and by the way, there is such thing as too much figurative language so don’t
overboard, I see a lot of writers make that mistake.”
“Overall, the story was ok, but it's definitely not great.
It needs a lot of improvements in the writing itself.”
“This is actually the first time I’m going to have to give a fanfic one quill out of
five.”
“But!
Don’t let that discourage you, I chose this fanfic for a reason, not only because I think
it has potential to be better, but also because I wanted show you guys these common mistakes
that a lot of writers make.
You may not even realize you're making them.
These common mistakes can really impact your story, that’s why rewrites are important.
Don’t be afraid to rewrite an entire story three times!
Trust me, I rewrite my chapters three times and I always found some mistakes I was making.”
“The point is, learn from your mistakes and you’ll prosper.”
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“Alright, that’s it for me, this is Snogwritts, signing out.”
Thanks for watching!